Shadows – Haiku

long leaves screen my eyes
from noon’s bright light, strewing sun
shadows over stone

Day 1: Haiku, alliteration, “screen”

 Copyright © 2015-10-04, by Elizabeth Bennefeld.

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6 thoughts on “Shadows – Haiku

  1. I enjoyed this, thank you. I had some difficulty with the syllable count, 5-7-5. I had to do a recount throughout the creative process continually. It was interesting and rendered an unexpected result.

    Thanks

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    • I have that trouble also. Gotten to where I keep all my versions, writing in a text file, revisions in a column, so that I can go back to a previous iteration and pick up an old line or part of one to fix what I broke. Looks like you did pretty good on the syllables on yours!

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